Rant Time - “Ohhhh, girl, you did not just go there.”
Okay. So we all know what flames are right? Yeah? Okay, so just as I’m about to finish off a story of mine, I came to conclusion that “Hey! I didn’t have a single flame on this whole journey! Whoo. Mission accomplished… kind of.” And of course, I had to jinx myself. Ohhh, girl, this bitch just made my delicious, imported coffee taste bitter or maybe it was just her. But damn.
Edit your chapters better, please. They’ll be ten times better once you do. As it is, they’re difficult to look past.
Okay, that one’s fine, actually. My writing isn’t the best and I know it. And the first chapters were rough even though I edited multiple times. But now that I got the hang of things, the errors are slowly decreasing.
I’ll just go ahead and say that was a very lame plot device. An arranged marriage was the best you could come up with? You DO realize the kids would have to agree to it first, right? They can’t force them into it. A.K.A., a very lame plot device, since it’s pretty darn obvious he’d never agree to it. I guess it would appeal to absent-minded teens, though…
Lame plot device, oh okay whatever. Sure, I kinda agree that I used a lame plot idea, come on, I was a newbie back then. Give me some slack. I went through the whole “Oh, hey, I think I can write. Let’s write a High school SasuSaku fic that starts out as Sakura waking up to her alarm, and shit” phase. But that’s not the point. You’re calling my lovely readers “absent-minded teens.” Ohhh, girl, you did not just go there. I tell you that my readers are NOT “absent minded teens.” You might be one. First of all, some of my readers aren’t even teens. Some are college students and some are even grads that are pretty flipping amazing. Second, “absent-minded?” My readers are not just readers, they’re my friends, whom some are amazing authors. Some are also people with a goal in life, okay. You can’t just go around labeling them because they choose to read my story, alright. Like damn, leave them out of this shit. You don’t know them. So shut up.
Huh? Since when did Sakura find relatives? I think you left out a chapter…or two.
Uhhh, I did not. That was something you had to foreshadow, honey. In previous chapters I hinted that Gaara and Sasori were her brothers. Like seriously, that wasn’t even that hard to figure out. Gaara and Sasori are both Harunos, you would kinda think that they’re somehow related to Sakura, one way or another. Pretty obvious thing I say.
When did Sakura get a last name? Since when was she not really an orphan? You’ve left out a TON of information.
Maybe you missed out on a TON of information. I don’t know. I’m pretty sure I had her last name in there somewhere and like seriously, “when was she not really an orphan?” Girl, like I said, do some foreshadowing, Gaara and Sasori, hello, last name matches. There has to be some kind of connection there. And chapter 19 was suppose to be a “surprise” anyways, so I don’t totally blame you on that. But this review, I can handle, because you know what? I might have did something wrong. Except the title clearly says that she had a last name… “This Girl’s Name is Sakura Haruno.” Um, yeah.
Ok, this is just getting stupid.
Okay yes, my writing is not the best but damn girl, back off. No one said you had to read it. You didn’t have to keep on reading and leaving flames if you clearly didn’t like it since the beginning. Like girl, just click the “x” on your window and read something else! Dang. There’s a thousand other stories on this site to read.
Some of the reviews she left were kinda good criticism but flames? Just leave. Especially the one about my readers. Like no, just no. Call me anything you want but you say something about my reader… you’re gonna get it. Sadly, I can’t do that because she did not have the courage to post it directly. Instead she posted it anonymously. Anyways, yeah. Don’t even know if she’s a girl or not but yeah.
And lastly, sorry for not updating TGNISH! School has been really hectic and I couldn’t find the time to write nor reply back to you guys. But I’m trying to update this weekend :) I think it’s about time that you guys got an update. Once again, really sorry.
P.S - Please excuse my lame inner ghetto self.
1. The meaning behind my URL
2. A picture of me
3. Why I love my bestfriend
4. Last time I cried and why
5. Piercings I have
6. Favorite Band
7. Biggest turn off(s)
8. Top 5 (insert subject)
9. Tattoos I want
10. Biggest turn on(s)
12. Ideas of a perfect date
13. Life goal(s)
14. Piercings I want
15. Relationship status
16. Favorite movie
17. A fact about my life
19. Middle name
20. Anything you want to ask
Go for it.
I think I’ve conquered the paperwork now :’)
22nd : ) Autumn starts
OK SO A HOT GUY BUMPED INTO ME ON THE STAIRS AND I STARTED TO FALL BUT HE CAUGHT ME AND I THOUGHT “I HEAR WEDDING BELLS” BUT APPARENTLY I ACCIDENTALLY SAID IT OUT LOUD AND THIS TALL GORGEOUS GUY BLUSHED AND STAMMERED A GOODBYE AND RAN AWAY
the only thing that would have made that better would be cherry blossoms
IM STILL CRYING
70% of editing is just looking at ur work for a few hours with this face